Lesson: Prewriting: Comparison and Contrast Exam# 355104
Prewriting: Compare and Contrast
Advanced –
score of 100%
The prewriting effectively addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of
the prompt.
x The writer chose one of the assigned topics and submitted an outline or graphic
organizer.
x The writer included all the required introductory information: a topic, background
statement, and thesis statement.
x The thesis statement makes a claim or takes a position on the topic, and the main points
are outlined clearly.
x The writer included at least 3 main points on the topic, with at least three supporting
elements for each. The main points connect clearly to and support the thesis statement
x The writer’s conclusion reinforced the thesis statement.
x The writer arranged the main points in a logical order to suit the claim made in the
thesis statement.
x The supporting elements provided for each main point are relevant and clearly illustrate
the comparison and contrast pattern of development for the chosen topic.
x The paper is mostly free of errors that interfere with a reader’s ability to understand the
content and uses the required font, header, line spacing, and margins.
Proficient score of 85%
The prewriting adequately addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements
of the prompt.
x The writer chose one of the assigned topics and submitted an outline or graphic
organizer.
x The writer included most of the required introductory information: a topic, background
statement, and thesis statement.
x The thesis statement makes a claim or takes a position on the topic, but the main points
are not outlined clearly.
x The writer included at least 3 main points on the topic, with at least two or more
supporting elements for each. The main points connect to and support the thesis
statement, however much of the information is obvious.
x The writer’s conclusion mostly reinforced the thesis statement.
x The writer arranged the main points in an order that mostly suits the claim made in the
thesis statement.
x The supporting elements provided for each main point are mostly relevant and
adequately illustrate the comparison and contrast pattern of development for the chosen
topic.
x The paper is reasonably free of errors that interfere with a reader’s ability to understand
the content and uses the required font, header, line spacing, and margins.
Developing score of 70%
The prewriting partially addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of
the prompt.
x The writer chose one of the assigned topics and submitted an outline or graphic
organizer.
Lesson: Prewriting: Comparison and Contrast Exam# 355104
x The writer included some of the required introductory information: a topic, background
statement, and thesis statement, however some of these elements are missing.
x The thesis statement does not make a claim or take a position on the topic and/or the
main points are not outlined.
x The writer included less than 3 main points on the topic and/or lacks three supporting
elements for each. The main points do not completely connect to and support the thesis
statement, and much of the information is obvious and/or needs more development.
x The writer’s conclusion is underdeveloped and/or is beginning to reinforce the thesis
statement.
x The writer arranged the main points in an order that is beginning to suit the claim made
in the thesis statement, but the outline lacks organization.
x The supporting elements provided for each main point lack focus, logical development,
and are beginning to illustrate the comparison and contrast pattern of development for
the chosen topic.
x The paper includes errors that interfere with a reader’s ability to understand the content
and/or does not use the required font, header, line spacing, and margins.
Emerging score of 60%
The prewriting minimally addresses the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of
the prompt.
x The writer chose one of the assigned topics but did not submit an outline or graphic
organizer.
x The writer minimally included some of the required introductory information: a topic,
background statement, and thesis statement, however most of these elements are
missing.
x The thesis statement does not make a claim or take a position on the topic, is not
related to the topic, and/or the main points are not outlined.
x The writer did not include 3 main points on the topic and/or lacks three supporting
elements for each. The main points do not connect to and support the thesis statement,
and much of the information is obvious and needs more development.
x The writer’s conclusion is underdeveloped, missing, and/or does not reinforce the
thesis statement.
x The writer is beginning to arrange the main points in an order that is could suit the
claim made in the thesis statement, but the outline lacks organization and focus.
x The supporting elements provided for each main point lack are minimally defined and
do not illustrate the comparison and contrast pattern of development for the chosen
topic.
x The paper includes some errors that make it difficult for a reader to understand the
content and/or does not use the required font, header, line spacing, and margins.
Lesson: Prewriting: Comparison and Contrast Exam# 355104
Not
Developed score of 50%
The prewriting does not address the purpose of the assignment and the requirements of the
prompt.
x The writer did not choose one of the assigned topics and/or did not submit an outline or
graphic organizer.
x The writer did not include all the required introductory information: a topic,
background statement, and thesis statement.
x The thesis statement does not make a claim or takes a position on the topic.
x The writer did not include at least 3 main points on the topic, with at least three
supporting elements for each. The main points do not connect clearly to and support
the thesis statement
x The writer’s conclusion does not reinforce the thesis statement.
x The writer did not arrange the main points in a logical order to suit the claim made in
the thesis statement.
x The supporting elements are not provided for each main point and/or are not relevant
and adequately illustrate the comparison and contrast pattern of development for the
chosen topic.
x The paper includes significant errors that make it extremely difficult for a reader to
understand the content and does not use the required font, header, line spacing, and
margins.
Exam Number: 355104 Grade: 70
Date: 7/14/23 Instructor: SO
Instructions for Essay:
Thank you for your submission and hard work! You’re ready to move on to the formal essay.
Before you start drafting your essay, you should
Review the exam instructions in your study materials online.
1. Apply the feedback I’ve included above.
2. Use the same topic for your essay as you did in this prewriting. Do not switch topics.
The compare and contrast essay is a formal essay based on this prewriting assignment. The goal
is to compare and contrast your topic, make a debatable claim about that comparison, and prove
that claim in your essay. Your essay will need
x An introduction with a thesis statement.
x Body paragraphs with topic sentences that each focus on one category.
x A conclusion that includes your paraphrased thesis.
Lesson: Prewriting: Comparison and Contrast Exam# 355104
Review the feedback I’ve provided and apply it as you work on your formal essay, which should
be 1,000–1,200 words. If you have any questions as you work, don’t hesitate to let the school
know.
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Topic: Comparing and contrasting online shopping and shopping at a physical location.
Background information: With the rise of technology, online shopping has become
increasingly popular, offering convenience and accessibility. However, traditional shopping at
physical locations still has its advantages in terms of sensory experiences and immediate product
availability.
Thesis Statement: Online shopping and shopping at a physical location differ in terms of
convenience, sensory experience, and product availability. Good thesis but it lacks an argument
as required. For example: Dogs make better pets than cats for solo-living introverts because
they provide emotional support, exercise, and security.
Point 1: Convenience
x Online shopping:
1. Can be done anytime and anywhere, providing a wide range of products at the
click of a button.
2. Allows for comparison shopping.
3. Eliminates the need to travel.
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Lesson: Prewriting: Comparison and Contrast Exam# 355104
x Shopping at a physical location:
1. Requires visiting a store in person, which may involve travel and limited store
hours.
2. Provides immediate access to products.
3. The ability to physically examine and try them.
Point 2: Sensory Experience
x Online shopping:
1. Lacks the sensory experience of physically interacting with products.
2. Relies on product descriptions, images, and customer reviews.
3. No opportunity to feel textures, try on clothes, or test functionality.
x Shopping at a physical location:
1. Offers a multisensory experience, allowing customers to touch, see, and even
smell products.
2. Provides the opportunity to try on clothes, test out electronics.
3. Evaluate the quality firsthand.
Point 3: Product Availability
x Online shopping:
1. Provides a vast selection of products from various sellers, including those that
may be difficult to find locally.
2. Can easily compare prices and read customer reviews.
3. Some items may be out of stock or have long delivery times.
Lesson: Prewriting: Comparison and Contrast Exam# 355104
x Shopping at a physical location:
1. Offers immediate access to products, allowing customers to see and purchase
items on the spot.
2. Limited to the available inventory of a particular store.
3. Eliminates the need to wait for shipping.
Conclusion: While online shopping offers convenience and a wide range of options, shopping at
a physical location provides a sensory experience and immediate product availability. The choice
between the two depends on individual preferences, urgency, and the desire for personal
interaction with products. Good conclusion but your thesis must take a position.
Good effort.